In my first draft, my MLA citations are formatted correctly, but they are basic and lack certain details. For example, I started my body paragraph with a quote from Turkle that lacked much of a clear introduction to the citation. Also, the in-text citations were correct, but they did not connect to a full works cited. Therefore, I did not fully and accurately cite Turkle or Carr. My final draft, on the other hand, was complete with MLA formatting. I provided the authors last name, with page number, and correct punctuation throughout. As far as the essay structure goes, I had multiple errors in the first draft. I was missing an MLA header, including my name, professor, class, and date. I was also missing a title that accurately represents the paper and page numbers beginning with my last name, not to mention a complete works cited with Turkle and Carr’s works. All of these are typical aspects of an MLA formatted essay which I amended in the final draft. It is also worth noting the local revisions I made from the first to final draft. Typical errors such as adding unnecessary commas were evident, such as in the following sentence “It lacks reasoning, and doesn’t give us a chance to think deeply about information or a topic” (Renton 1). Overall, the transition from my first draft to my final draft formulated the use of proper MLA formatting and citations, clarity, and my ability to address grammatical writing errors. I have shown growth in organizing the ideas of Turkle, Carr, and myself all the while making my essay more polished with a stronger presentation.
